Lord Anzius

Have you noticed the "check spelling" button on the right side of the text box, just above the box???? Remember the space after comas and other punctuation marks, always spell ...

WOW! Cool 8) some mistakes still, I'll just list them down: "Who am I? Why can't I remember? He racked his brains trying to find any memory of him, you ...

Not in the historical section (it is a world of fancy :P ) The story is good, but what the person above said is correct. Do not write the dialogue ...

Well written. Not too short, long enough for a prologue but, you jump too much: from pig dung to a giggling girl etc. Sabbath day (what world is that???????" :) ...

Nice your really starting to improve. I love te story already. Can't wait to read the rest, just pm me when you get the next part done. :D Regards: Lord ...

As said veru philosophical, makes you think. I don't know about that poem thing though. Is it ment to be this gloomy? verry good anywayz. I liked it at the ...

I think that in the start of the chapter when you jumped from straight from the VERY short explanation of the setting to the actual story was a bit irritating ...

Good work yet again but there are a few things = Dad seems to take more pride in the two of us then Matt or Dean. I wonder if at ...

TOO MUCH MYSTERIES I CAN'T TAKE IT ARGHHHH[heart attack] :D Like I just emphasised, I personally don't like this kind of mysterious stuff, tell me what she does, tell part ...

To be straight I'm not sure is that death. You have written that death will be there in a few minutes but when at last "the voice" speaks for the ...

Well it has a nice feel to it and it also has that "something" that makes people read books in the first place. But compliments aside, it is true you ...